This is not funny. Not
like that time Scott laughed
which made Janet laugh--
I mistook "Oh my ribs!"
for "Oh my ass!" doubled over,
out of breath, a laughing fish.
Doug practically turned blue
in all that silliness.
It's not like when Tina threw candy
at the cheerleaders. Or how my dogs
bowl me over sometimes,
lick me as if bits of food are
all over my face. My parenst laugh,
and I am busy getting them off,
trying to recover. This isn't funny.
This isn't funny at all.
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andrew, this, to me is when you are at your best. this is a very interesting and unique endeavor, allowing the title to really go to work for you, then kind of dancing around all that it says...very nice
some of the images can be expanded or fleshed out...tina and the candy is kinda floating on a island right now, since you spend so much time with doug and the dogs...maybe doug is too close to dog...maybe a new name?
brian, what do you say bout this:
It's not like during the footbal games,
when Tina threw M&Ms
at the cheerleaders, always
plinking off theirs heads.
Or how my dogs bowl me over sometimes,
lick me as if bits of food are
all over my face. My parents laugh,
and I am busy getting them off,
trying to recover. This isn't funny.
bit better? there's a bit more time on Tina's part, at least, has a little more body to it...
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