tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.comments2010-07-09T11:43:05.247-07:00Plain American LanguageReading the Districthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11635072700180534927noreply@blogger.comBlogger100125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-58932179915657054122010-07-09T11:43:05.247-07:002010-07-09T11:43:05.247-07:00hola amigo seguro que no entendes castellano te lo...hola amigo seguro que no entendes castellano te lo pongo en ingles hello frend you are a teacher for inglesmartinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05527946587491347098noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-60086831745478464622010-05-11T17:09:34.599-07:002010-05-11T17:09:34.599-07:00Um hi! I really liked this one maybe you can read ...Um hi! I really liked this one maybe you can read my blog its called life of a 13 year old and tell your friends about it. I have no readers :(Corinnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10911282776906853487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-11006396337927446942010-04-28T19:32:40.778-07:002010-04-28T19:32:40.778-07:00thanks vanessa! how're you and kyle doing???thanks vanessa! how're you and kyle doing???Reading the Districthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11635072700180534927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-1860030403101706492010-04-28T19:30:05.698-07:002010-04-28T19:30:05.698-07:00I am sorry you were having a bummer moment. Hopef...I am sorry you were having a bummer moment. Hopefully the writing helped. :)Vanessa Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10398392394284077421noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-21265052919730337772010-02-03T18:32:17.292-08:002010-02-03T18:32:17.292-08:00i've been really into writing sonnets (dunno i...i've been really into writing sonnets (dunno if you've noticed), so i'm trying to keep it to fourteen lines. i think i like the abruptness of the "I'm over them" but i dunno, what do you think?Reading the Districthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11635072700180534927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-54593372843828754732010-02-03T17:50:06.936-08:002010-02-03T17:50:06.936-08:00It's interesting. I have been thinking about d...It's interesting. I have been thinking about death as well - that always happens around my birthday. Not sure that I understand "chicken soup", but I really enjoyed several lines: "walking down your leg" is well crafted; second stanza is strong overall; walks away like a leaking faucet is great.<br /><br />One thing you can try is combining the last two stanzas --<br /><br />Death leads you into the room<br />and pulls out the yearbook<br />laughs out loud at the jokers<br />jocks and nerds, words - soup<br />through bones, walking away <br />like a leaking facet.<br /><br />Maybe cut even further. I dunno. I guess play with trimming. Maybe not.Olgahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13315813772080275968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-47013022493780621152010-01-24T20:23:45.922-08:002010-01-24T20:23:45.922-08:00Well, the sex is fine by me, but I read that into ...Well, the sex is fine by me, but I read that into it without the last three lines, really. I see limbs bending as light twice, and it did more the first time around for me because I had to make the leap on my own. So I guess, what I am saying is that the repetition didn't add anything for me. The last three lines are weaker than everything else, and I really like the "everything else".<br /><br />The first line is telling. The rest of the poem is showing, like a peep show...a SEXY peep show :)Olgahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13315813772080275968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-74133379401516351222010-01-22T04:08:20.802-08:002010-01-22T04:08:20.802-08:00you don't like that it turns into sex at the e...you don't like that it turns into sex at the end? or what are you not sure about? i can see your point with the first line--kinda out of place.<br /><br />80 poems in 80 days, eh? maybe i can rise up to that challenge once more...<br /><br />great to see you back and posting!!! yes, let's talk soon!Reading the Districthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11635072700180534927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-16914671305053214302010-01-21T20:49:19.553-08:002010-01-21T20:49:19.553-08:00I really like the the business going on in the mid...I really like the the business going on in the middle -- sharp (from "round the insides" through "Limbs that bend as time"). Not sure about the last three lines, and the first line.<br /><br />Also, new blog. Doing 80 poems in 80 days again. Let's chat soon...<br /><br />http://olgabrichto.blogspot.com/Olgahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13315813772080275968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-83439460926758627662009-10-16T08:05:17.664-07:002009-10-16T08:05:17.664-07:00"like frying pans we understand" is real..."like frying pans we understand" is really good. Last 3 lines confound me a bit...Olgasmichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13509449127579670928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-33979724567505326102009-10-11T17:41:27.260-07:002009-10-11T17:41:27.260-07:00If I were a windmill, I would grind up against you...If I were a windmill, I would grind up against you.<br />And, being thorough,<br />Continue to turn.<br /><br />These three lines are brilliant. I love the meter. I love the metaphor. You should try a metrical poem!...and Enidehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04449087288715306947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-48052836725701612862009-04-08T20:46:00.000-07:002009-04-08T20:46:00.000-07:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-24867028409336299252009-04-04T07:38:00.000-07:002009-04-04T07:38:00.000-07:00oh, i'm fine...this was from when israel was fight...oh, i'm fine...this was from when israel was fighting with gaza so much. i couldn't stand it. thank you for asking, though!Reading the Districthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11635072700180534927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-90416125811851159472009-04-03T18:45:00.000-07:002009-04-03T18:45:00.000-07:00Wow. Are you okay?Wow. Are you okay?...and Enidehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04449087288715306947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-84593105537127990222008-12-15T16:47:00.000-08:002008-12-15T16:47:00.000-08:00most definitely not! haha. no, i found it online...most definitely not! haha. no, i found it online.Reading the Districthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11635072700180534927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-6391317900938075532008-12-15T11:28:00.000-08:002008-12-15T11:28:00.000-08:00You can translate Greek?You can translate Greek?...and Enidehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04449087288715306947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-16035256360357605112008-12-14T16:57:00.000-08:002008-12-14T16:57:00.000-08:00not intentional...probably the translation. but i...not intentional...probably the translation. but it's from a greek poet...so i dunno?Reading the Districthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11635072700180534927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-22286895478631405032008-12-14T00:26:00.000-08:002008-12-14T00:26:00.000-08:00This poem reads like a Psalm. Is that intentional?...This poem reads like a Psalm. Is that intentional?...and Enidehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04449087288715306947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-1278737906547840472008-09-26T16:31:00.000-07:002008-09-26T16:31:00.000-07:00I likes this one too.I likes this one too.Melhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13246553325189444391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-49441957569945459952008-09-23T10:37:00.000-07:002008-09-23T10:37:00.000-07:00I like it.I like it.Melhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13246553325189444391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-17903502050018415482008-09-23T10:26:00.000-07:002008-09-23T10:26:00.000-07:00I really liked that one Andrew!I really liked that one Andrew!Vanessa Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10398392394284077421noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-8873137690121882332008-09-16T22:32:00.000-07:002008-09-16T22:32:00.000-07:00dear friend, thanks for your beautiful poem born i...dear friend, thanks for your beautiful poem born in the calm of my home in the south, last place in which you decided to travel before starting off for your native earth.<BR/><BR/> Under the influence of the fire and the friendship that unites to us, you created an inner and near decripción that reflects yourself <BR/><BR/> we will miss you always, surprise friend <BR/>luck in the life… with talent! hugsretamalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07121806532683967655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-71854920183945139512008-09-11T18:13:00.000-07:002008-09-11T18:13:00.000-07:00cool poem, and thanks for sharing, but maybe you c...cool poem, and thanks for sharing, but maybe you could explain some of it to me. Along with your thought process. I have mostly read poetry in a structured class with the background of the author and possible meanings attached. <BR/>-Novice poetry readerVanessa Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10398392394284077421noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-48007305444996534072008-09-07T19:25:00.000-07:002008-09-07T19:25:00.000-07:00andrew...how are you? thanks for the link and i re...andrew...how are you? thanks for the link and i really enjoyed the last few poems you posted. =)Ashleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11173860209568007733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7853363457205628393.post-9743985710742521922008-09-03T07:10:00.000-07:002008-09-03T07:10:00.000-07:00I don't get the candle part. Why are candles of n...I don't get the candle part. Why are candles of no help? Is it just that they are generally distracting? Where does the title come from? Is it just a way of saying there are many dining choices? The narrator is trying to decide which lunch to have at a hodgepodge/crossover restaurant? I was confused because I definitely thought it was a Chinese takeout place and then I was like, wait a minute. Chile? I like the poem though, although it makes me hungry. It's kind of fun in an unnecessarily anxious about making a daily choice moment kind of way.Melhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13246553325189444391noreply@blogger.com